Claire's Class

[Hikaru]

'Allo there, Claire! ^^ Welcome to my class. Just wanna tell you a couple things first before we start. I'm an easy going person, so I'll work with you, but just keep in mind that no matter what I won't hold back or lie to you about anything xD If you have anything you need to work on, whether you point it out or I notice, then we'll focus on that until you're confident in that area xD Also...

My number one rule is to have fun! ^^ Always remember that roleplay is all about just having fun and getting anything out you just want to. Never feel stressed or pressured to reply to something XD

Now, for starters, do you mind posting a paragraph for me? ^^ It doesn't need to be too much, just about five sentences, You can make it longer if you wish, just don't get too carried away and such. Its just to demonstrate your grammar and descriptive skills and show me where you are =3 I know you're intermediate level but exactly where in that range I'm not sure. Anyway...

It can be about whatever you want, and just remember the whole have fun thing xD

[~¤*Claire*¤~]

Okay, you seem like a great teacher Also, I usually just do horse role play.

A gentle wind blew over the deserted, chilled, plains of the mid west. It looked much like it would in an old western film, ominous music playing slowly. Yet no music could be heard, just the long grass lightly playing in the breeze, and hoof beats that rhythmically pounded into the dry, cracked earth. The fiery orb we call the sun slowly departed from the sky, casting it's last pink and orange rays across the bare plains. Slowly, a horse appeared on the horizon, it's starless ebony pelt flashing, catching anyone's eye as the sinking sun shone upon it.

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[Hikaru]

Thanks ^^ And alright... its good =3 whatever makes you comfortable....

Anyway... alright, well that's a really good post. I love the way you brought it in first describing the land to make it seem more believable and then brought in your character and told us some stuff about it. =)

Before we get farther... I'm going to ask if you have any areas you would prefer to work on or you wanna just work in general? xD Cause otherwise we'll just work on each thing in turn ^^ From what I can see, there isn't much you need, you're a great roleplayer as is... heh, heck anyone can always improve XD

Oh yea, that reminds me. If you ever feel like I'm doing something wrong or something just tell meh ^^

[~¤*Claire*¤~]

I'll work on what ever you feel needs to change in my role playing. And your doing nothing wrong. Yeah, I need a lot of improvement I think. There is one thing I really want to learn. In Wild Equines, the place I role play, you can steal mares. It's really fun, and I want to get better at it. You have to give 3 clues to mke it offical, if themare's lead stallion does not say, -stallion's name- block -mare's name- in 3 days time, the mare is the poem makers. Any way you can help me get better at that? I've made one for some one else, but that is all, here it is.

Getting your heart is what I want
You have half a desert heart
Put all your love for your current stallion away
So, one way or another, you'll be mine someday
I want you much, broken coated mare

You are soon to be mine
If you stallion can't reply
In three moons time

[Hikaru]

Alrighty then ^^ Sounds good... well, since you mentioned that, I guess we'll work on that for a while then.

Hmm... well personally, I find that a very pretty piece of poetry ^^ Nice job on it...

So, are you asking for help on better poetry writing or asking help on getting better at the actual roleplay of stealing mares? I can help on both if you wish xD

[Lazy Claire]

Sorry I have not been on in forever and a day!! okay, I have decided I'll just work on general role playing, as I have no stallions anymore on my RPG. I have no reason to steal. So, what now chief? Can I call you chief, it's a pretty cool name.