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Post by stripes on Sept 13, 2007 14:09:37 GMT -5
Username: Stripes Age: 13 How long have you role played? About 3-4 months Do you request a certain teacher? Nope How did you find us? Someone told me about it on Wild Equines Example Post: The rain beat down as the young mare cantered through the downpour. She was lost, she didn't know where she was. What could she do? She had lost everything, her parents, her herd, everything that she had cared for. She was giving up. She had nothing left, just an wounded heart and an empty soul. She felt like this was the end. There was nothing left for her in this world. She was alone. What could she do? What could anyone do? She felt like just lying down, never to get up again. But no, she couldn't do that. She couldn't just give up on life.
Cantering through the trees, the downpour continued, soaking the fae's ebon pelt. Stopping in a small clearing, she looked around her, her eyes wide. She was alone and she had no idea where to go. Thinking that someone must be around, she reared up, letting out a loud nicker, asking for someone to come and tell her how she could get out of here. She felt trapped, like someone was leering down at her from above, plotting someway to hurt her. It wasn't a nice feeling and she wanted to get out. Fast.
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Post by Tigger on Sept 13, 2007 19:40:29 GMT -5
Accepted. Your example is rather well written. You can really feel how she feels, at least I can (which is a good thing, me being the admin and all.) Though it does seem rather dedundant about her feeling 'alone... lost.. no place to go... trapped' sort of feeling. All in all, however, a good example. Umm.. I will put you in the beginner class for now, though you could be moved around a bit. Since the site is new and all... this is just kinda to even things out a bit. Umm, chances of you being move are high, to in between. (this was a really long acceptance thing)
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